¶ … program whereby troubled teens can help themselves by helping seniors. In addition to the background information I provided in the main body of the paper, I also conducted an interview. The interview section needed a lot of work in terms of better grammar and organization. I also had some grammar errors that needed to be corrected before the proposal was finalized. I also would like to combine the two main background sections about background and the interview, so that the entire project proposal flows and is easy and pleasant to read. So far, my paper contains the following sections:
Outline of idea
Pitch
Interview
Consultation with Secondary Sources
I would like to rearrange my paper so that the interview and consultation of secondary sources are integrated into the body of the paper. I would then re-write...
Ideally I will also include the transcript of the primary source (interview) as an appendix. A new introduction will provide an abstract, or overview, of what the project includes. Hopefully, it will be exciting enough to draw in the reader. The new conclusion will briefly summarize the project and allow me to end on a positive note. The revised introduction and conclusion are as follows:
Introduction
My big idea begins with a dream to help two distinct populations in the community: teenagers and seniors. I believe that by bringing together teenagers and seniors, both populations will benefit. However, I need to conduct research that shows why and how my big idea will work in the real world. This project proposal suggests a way to create a program…
